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05-03-2009, 10:55 AM
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Cool. I'm excited to see what you'll do with the character.
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05-04-2009, 07:17 AM
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Great start, Massacre Man! Can't wait to see what you do with my character (and everyone else's too ;) )!
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CHAPTER 2
FADE IN INT. TWLIGHT CITY, WESTWARD PENTHOUSE - NIGHT The lights still off around the city, a shaggy-haired man in a maroon suit holding a flashlight wanders blindly through his penthouse. He is leaving a large amount of monitors attached to a control panel shut off by the storm, a metallic fox mask resting on it. This is ERIC WESTWARD, he uses the flashlight to guide him to the door that leads to- INT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD PENTHOUSE, BASEMENT - NIGHT Eric attempts to turn on the generator but it won't start. He gets aggravated. ERIC Work! The generator kicks in and begins to work. He smiles to himself, accomplished. Eric returns upstairs. INT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD PENTHOUSE - NIGHT Eric sits at his control panel, all of the 15 monitors have what appear to be eye-level security camera footage. Eric sets the fox mask back in the drawer by the table, next to the flashlight. One of the "security cameras" in the monitors begins to move as if it's walking. Eric is focused on that screen. He has a night-vision view of the street. The view wanders to an alley. CUT TO EXT. TWILIGHT CITY ALLEY - NIGHT Two large trucks are parked next to each other. Four thugs gather around a man on his knees, bleeding from the nose, both eyes blackened. THUG #1 You know that because of you Roland had to call in one of his favors to stay out of prison, right? MAN I'm sorry! The cops offered me immunity if I talked! THUG #2 Look what this immunity got ya! Get me a gun outta the truck. MAN Please! THUG #3 Which gun? THUG #2 Surprise me. Thug #3 walks back to the truck and puts his hand on the handle of the door when he hears a gunshot then the sound of water quickly freezing over. He looks down and sees his hand frozen to the handle of the door. He shouts when quickly running into the alley is the "security camera" A robotic man, very well-disguised as a human with a revolver in hand. Dressed in a red cloak and cavalier clothing topped off with a red fox mask and a swashbuckler hat. In it's other hand is a hook that it shoots like a grappling hook into a part of the wall ahead of it. The wire retracts a bit allowing the "Volpone" robot to swing through the air over the trucks and land in the pile. It manages to fight them all off and tie every thug's hands behind their backs, The robot leaves them as they are. INT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD PENTHOUSE - NIGHT Eric leans back in his chair with another accomplished smile on his face. EXT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD POST - DAY The next morning, everything seems to be back to normal. The rain has stopped. Though everything around the city is still wet. We see the building for the WESTWARD POST a large building, the headquarters for a nationally-distributed newspaper. INT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD POST, MAIN LOBBY - DAYEric is walking to the elevator, in a black suit. With him is Eli Downey, a member of the board and the company's second-in-command, behind Eric. Downey seems to be angry. ELI (Infuriated) Do you really think this is good for us? ERIC (Calm) If I didn't think it was good for us do you think I would have done it? ELI This is ridiculous! Downsizing the sports section to expand the arts section! Giving free adspace to charities! What's next? ERIC Next? Maybe firing everyone who keeps questioning me. Eric grins at Eli and steps into the elevator. Eli looks horrified, his jaw hangs open. Eric laughs. ERIC Just kidding, Downey. If I got rid of you who would I have to make that face? ELI Your father wouldn't approve of any of this. Eric reaches out to shake Eli's hand. Eli grabs it. ERIC Hi. My name is Eric Westward and, despite popular belief, I'm not my goddamn father. Eric lets go of Eli's hand and waves. The doors close. INT. TWLIGHT CITY, WESTWARD POST, TOP FLOOR - DAY Eric gets out of the elevator at the top floor, a large, place decorated with several framed covers of the newspapers he's published. There's a door at the end leading to Eric's office, in front of the door is the desk of Eric's secretary. She's a cute girl, not overly sexy, but attractive in a modest, more innocent way. He walks to her desk. Her eyes are glued to her computer screen. ERIC Morning, Sydney. Sydney quickly looks up. SYDNEY Good morning, Mr. Westward. I didn't hear you come in. Eric is much more hesitant with his words than he was with Mr. Downey. ERIC I uh... noticed. SYDNEY Did you notice? ERIC Notice what? SYDNEY Oh! Probably not, I'm behind my desk. Don't I feel dumb. Sydney stands up from her chair and walks out, showing Eric her high-heeled shoes. SYDNEY I'm wearing the shoes you got me! ERIC Oh! Di... Did you like them? SYDNEY Yes. Thank you. ERIC Glad you like them. You look great in them. Sydney makes eye contact with Eric. Like she's waiting for him to say something more. ERIC So, is there anything on my schedule for today? Sydney breaks the eye contact and with a dissatisfied expression opens a planner on her desk. SYDNEY Um. Nothing until four. ERIC What's at four? SYDNEY You have an appointment to meet with a Gabriel Fret. ERIC Who is that? SYDNEY I'm not sure. Maybe just another charity looking for adspace. ERIC Right. Well, I'll be in my office. SYDNEY I'll be here. Eric walks to the door of his office and opens the door. He walks inside, then leans back out. ERIC Hey, Sydney. SYDNEY Yeah? ERIC I wanted to ask... Are you... You know what? Nevermind. Eric returns to his office. FADE OUT.
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Cool! Great work. Just the sort of mannerism I was thinking of. Not Tony Starkish at all.
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Very nice MM. You're off to a great start.
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pretty nice going, MM!
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AWESOME! I can't wait until Screech comes in.
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