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I'm not seeing the main idea in your untitled book. Being evil is good. T:mad:hat isn't fitting in with me.

LOL - I've discovered an new sub genre - Grammar Nazi exploitation :-)
How do u look in Jack boots Elvis?

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The heading on the daily news paper, read. "15,000,000 are unemployed in the U.S." Timmy fished in his pants pocket and pulled out three quarter, tossing them in his palm like dice, inserting the quarters into the news paper machine, he yanks on the news paper machine handle and pulls out a news paper.:D

Non of you can do better.

Newspaper is one word. There doesn't need to be a comma. Quarters should be plural. Period after dice. This doesn't need to be one sentence. Newspaper is still one word. A word you use four times in a paragraph. "Newspaper machine handle" is clunky. And lastly what the hell else is he gonna pull out? A squirrel? Poverty is scary, it's wonderful grounds for horror (Texas Chainsaw Massacre, The People Under The Stairs) but something must be coming out of the poverty. Read Jung, read Campbell and to learn to write read The Art of Fiction or On Writing. I don't want to be mean, but I can do better. I'll have three books in print come October. One of which was compared favorably to the works of Jonathan Swift in a review. You have expressed that any work of King's has less merit than the very mediocre The Regulators because statistically it sold less (Wikipedia is a wonderful substitute for literacy, isn't it?) and have displayed an ignorance in regards to using the English language as tool or weapon. Learn some humility, read more and hone the craft.
"Starving for a red hot hotdog, Timmy took his final Taco Bell paycheck to Dr.Hotdog's hotdog shack. He looked at the hotdog girl, with burning hotdog desire in his eyes and pain in his hotdogless stomach, and said "Gimme a hotdog." They were out of hotdogs."
Don't do THAT!

David Crowleyfield? Remember this: in genre fiction, you do not need characters to be wacked out druggies for weird things to happen. Read some Kafka. Read some Burroughs. Ligotti. Barker. Mc Cammon. It might be neat to do the autobiography of somebody who has grown up with the taint of evil on him, but I'd say look for another angle and play up the humor in the concept. The coming of age novel is a tiresome thing and poking holes in it using horror and satire can be pretty cool. I would say: think nature/nurture conflict, think existential questions, think the rock and roll lifestyle. Sex, drugs and rock and roll can supplement a Dorian Grey type hedonist but they cannot make them a person and they cannot be used as a reason for strange events to happen. Also, ask yourself if you have a story or just some images. It happens to me all the time. I have a cool image in my head and some vague occurrences surrounding it and I sit down believing I'm writing a novel. Three brainbusting days later, I realize I had a piece of flash fiction at best. Write stories, try a novella first. It takes some amount of grit and experience in writing to do a good novel. More grit to sell a good novel when you don't know anybody.

Wait....are you telling me you've never reached into a "news paper machine" and pulled out a squirrel ? I find that hard to believe.:rolleyes:

No, but I occasionally have the misfortune of finding newspapers in my Vend-a-Squirrel machine.

thank you for that. it would be better without the drugs. that just improved my idea. thank you. :D

I think you mean Dorian Gray :-)

I think I'll do a tag team with Elvis :-)

I thought that looked wrong.