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Originally Posted by Doc Faustus
This might be of interest:
http://www.samsdotpublishing.com/tentacles.htm
The imminent death cheapens your ending and the recorder is kind of hackneyed at this point. The atmosphere and usage are skillfully vintage and ring true. I think you may actually have a better story with a survivor than with a casualty. I'm not saying turn the narrator into some howling Friday the 13th style wildman proclaiming dark prophecies, but your ending would feel harsher if he walked away from it. |
hmmm... I don't like "cheapened", so i will definitely rethink it... however, I know the recorder thing is hackneyed, it was an intentional throwback to
Notebook found in a deserted house by Robert Bloch :)