Originally Posted by bwind22
There wasn't anything out of the ordinary in the childhood of James Daniels. What is written above basically sums it up. He was a well adjusted kid from a loving home with a normal family life and normal friends. He got decent grades in school and had no behavioral problems.
At this point in his life, everything is still predominantly normal and as described above, but as you will soon find out, the moment he met Judy was the beginning of his downfall.
A good introduction. It didn't pick you up any points but it wasn't necessarily a mistake. It does rule out anything from his life before Judy but once again, that is by no means a mistake.
What we are not told here is that the person Judy broke it off with, unbeknownst to James, was his childhood friend Daniel. Judy happened to be from the the town neighboring the one where Daniel went to college. Judy & Daniel had been dating for less than a year when she met James and broke it off and decided to move in with him.
A very well thought out twist in the tale. There isn't much to say about it, but it was well thought out. Perception and creativity points gained here.
As I mentioned, one of the friends he made in college was his girlfriend Judy. Because James and Daniel had lost touch, James was never aware that Daniel had a girlfriend at all. Once Judy left Daniel and moved in with James, Daniel's life took a turn for the lonely. He took an out of town job, moved to a shitty house and became quite depressed.
By putting Daniel in a desperate situation you can then bring him into the loop to put stress on the rest, which works especially well when coupled with the affair. Logic and creativity points gained.
When Daniel moved in, he and Judy decided to keep their previous relationship concealed from James. After a few weeks, their passion was reignited and a steamy affair took place right under James' unknowing nose. One night, James came home early and very nearly caught Daniel in Judy in the act. At that point, Daniel decided it'd be best to call off their steamy romance. He moved across town and got himself a new girlfriend, Caron. He and Caron were happy for a short time but eventually his lust for Judy overtook his will to be committed only to Caron and the affair resumed. Neither Caron, nor James had any idea.
It would be likely that they would keep their relationship hidden given the circumstances. The affair was an obvious move, but not a bad one. Also, continuing the relationship even after Caron meant that she could be involved too. Creativity and perception points gained.
Years passed and Daniel and Judy's nefarious deeds continued. James was completely in the dark and never had any clue. As far as he was aware, they were a happy family unit.
[I]On November 2nd, James received a call from Daniel's grilfriend, Caron. She said she had found a pair of panties under the bed and they didn't belong to her. Her suspicions prompted her to search through Daniel's personal items where she found a collection of homemade pornography consisting of Judy & Daniel. She called James to inform him because she thought it was only fair that he knew.
I would have thought that Daniel and Judy would be more careful than to keep home made pornography in their house but it could happen. This would be the ultimate insult to James, putting the stress on him.
On November 3rd, James confronted Judy about it. Judy denied any wrongdoing at first, but eventually came clean and confessed that she had been having an affair with Daniel since 1994. Heartbroken and depressed, James continued asking questions to which he'd rather not know the answer. Then she dropped the bombshell. Lucy wasn't his daughter. James left the house in a fury.
The fact that Lucy wasn't his daughter was a good addition as well, throwing him over the edge. Logic, creativity and perception points gained.
On November 4th, James did not show up for work at Red Lobster. Instead, he parked and waited outside Daniel's apartment. Around 2:30 in the afternoon, Daniel and Judy left the apartment together and got in Daniel's car. James followed them. When they stopped at the only gas station in their small town, James was right behind them. Rage, anger and betrayal were written all over James' face as he reached under the front seat, produced a pistol and followed them in to the store.
I'm not sure why Judy went straight to Daniel's house and went for a drive to the gas station after it had all come out, but it could happen I suppose. Creativity points gained.
James entered the store, pointed the pistol at Daniel and said "How could you?" before pulling the trigger and putting a hole in his forehead. He then turned the gun on Judy and said "I loved you!" before firing again and dropping her to the floor. The stunned cashier instinctively reached under the counter and produced a shotgun typically used to ward off robbers. Before the cashier could get the shotgun pointed towards James, James had put two slugs in to his chest. James then left the crimescene and headed to Lucy's school with the intention of picking her up and fleeing town.
A good ending to the lives of two deceitful people.
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