Yes, that's why I asked. I think it's a mistake to have a punctuation error in the title, though.
You've made a good start, but we don't really get to know anything about the character except sketchy generalities. A diary is something where a person writes their inner most secrets and thoughts. "I went to daddys funeral. I cried." What was her relationship with her father like? What memories does she have? How much is she going to miss him?
Also, stuttering is something people do when they speak. They don't really do it when they write.
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