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Originally Posted by vampyd1977
i found the sentence structures very basic and regimented, the content varied but felt repetetive.
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There are some very basic structures in there, I wouldn't have said it was too regimented that i'm sure is a mistake every rookie author makes in an attempt to complete a book for the first time.
I would however be very careful using references to "facebook" and "linkdin" etc as we all know how much trouble the social media super powers can be.
The story line was good, i loved the fact you started straight out with the action.
My 2 issues with it would be...
1 - when you read it, it feels like a constant build up wait for some serious action that never comes. almost cliffhanger ish.
2 - i ran out of pages to read
but otherwise i think you are heading in the "write" direction (see what i did there
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i am in no way a professional writer but i am an avid reader, this is just my own opinion.