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The story line was good, i loved the fact you started straight out with the action.
Hi Jake,
I managed to make a start on your manuscript last night - and I'll start by echoing what teddy said:
'The storyline was good, i loved the fact you started straight out with the action.'
The first few lines grabs your attention and sets the scene up instantly. As an introduction, I thought you nailed it.
Writing in first person is a difficult one. Don't be scared about going off on a tangent, with some detailed prose in-between the main thread. You don't have to remain in the lead character's head all the time; deviate a little just to break it up.
Good luck with the agent/publisher.
I'll read more - and try to remain objective. ;-)
All the best, Paul.
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