WITCHES WOODS - 10 minute short film by bwind22

[Angra]

Originally Posted by bwind22

The black hair fella is my cousin Joe. He was my best man when I got married & is more or less my right hand man when it comes to this kinda stuff. He's always game to make a film. :) On a related note, he is also the star of my next film, Everyday Hero and can be seen in the superhero costume in the trailer linked above. :)

Yeah i watched that trailer. Had me laughing.

It IS a comedy, right?

[The STE]

Not bad, especially considering the mess my first one turned out to be.




a few notes:

0:37 - I heard a voice, sounded like someone off-screen say "now" or "go" or something.

0:38 - stray frames, should cut it a bit more precisely here

0:39-0:40 - the girl spikes the lense

0:49-1:11 - nice job not getting the camera's reflection in the car

Credits - I wouldn't use a red font for stuff you're posting on YouTube, preferably in general unless you can get a really high res output. Red text never looks good.

1:11-1:26 - I would've broken this into different camera angles to make it not seem so long.

1:26-1:36 - same here

1:36 - While neat for using in home-done stuff, the transition doesn't fit the mood you seem to be going for.

1:36-1:42 - While it's hard as hell to work the camera while driving, watch your framing here. His head's a bit too far to the left in the frame, it feels kindof awkward. Same with the subsequent shots of the driver. Good work using the camera while driving, though, or however you did this shot.

2:02-2:13 - You broke the 180 line here. The car should be going the opposite direction. It looks like they're heading back the way they came.

2:36-2:41 - Excellent framing here, with her opening the door and getting out right into the middle of the frame. Might want to trim a little bit at the beginning, though.

2:59-3:05 - The first shot should be before the second guy is in the woods already. The OS voice seems like he's still standing in close proximity to the girl.

3:02 - black frame between shots

5:39-5:43 - HA!

6:03-6:15 - EXCELLENT framing here.

6:19-6:20 - HAHAHAHAHA!!!! "Right THERE!"

6:19-6:20 - I had to watch that part again. "Right THERE!" Hehehe.

7:09-7:10 - "LEAVE US ALONE!" HA! You should just have a movie of that guy yelling things. It can be a buddy movie with your guy and my Change Wanting Customer.

6:54-7:44 - You should've had something with an orange glow sitting where you added the fire to give the fire more presence.

8:28-8:31 - Nice.

6:19-6:20 - "Right THERE!" Haha. That never gets old.

8:31-8:36 - Nice shot there. But for a last shot I would've gone with a wide shot of a clearing in the woods, maybe one with a lot of dead trees if you found one.

[roshiq]

nice start, wind!

Though I have very little idea in this field but I think it would be looking good if the camera moves around sometimes....in some shot it would be better to pan the camera in cope with the sequence/scene.

any way, best of luck & waiting to see more from you in the future.

[Geddy]

Good job, Bwind!

[Zero]

i like the line "we've got to find her, she's got my keys" - as opposed to 'because she's lost' - typical american male attitude (screw teh girl, where are my car keys)

[massacre man]

Anybody know any good movies about transvestite witches?

[Zero]

Originally Posted by The STE

7:09-7:10 - "LEAVE US ALONE!" HA!

the best part is that one of the next lines is . . . oh well let's get some sleep. i think they should have at least had some beers first!

Great job b-w - I really enjoyed it.

[Zero]

i was expecting at least one topless shot- if Michelle wouldn't do it - Joe probably would (he's such a whore for the camera).

[bwind22]

Originally Posted by Angra

Yeah i watched that trailer. Had me laughing.

It IS a comedy, right?

Yep, that one will be an action/comedy. :)

[bwind22]

Originally Posted by The STE

Not bad, especially considering the mess my first one turned out to be.




a few notes:

0:37 - I heard a voice, sounded like someone off-screen say "now" or "go" or something.

0:38 - stray frames, should cut it a bit more precisely here

0:39-0:40 - the girl spikes the lense

0:49-1:11 - nice job not getting the camera's reflection in the car

Credits - I wouldn't use a red font for stuff you're posting on YouTube, preferably in general unless you can get a really high res output. Red text never looks good.

1:11-1:26 - I would've broken this into different camera angles to make it not seem so long.

1:26-1:36 - same here

1:36 - While neat for using in home-done stuff, the transition doesn't fit the mood you seem to be going for.

1:36-1:42 - While it's hard as hell to work the camera while driving, watch your framing here. His head's a bit too far to the left in the frame, it feels kindof awkward. Same with the subsequent shots of the driver. Good work using the camera while driving, though, or however you did this shot.

2:02-2:13 - You broke the 180 line here. The car should be going the opposite direction. It looks like they're heading back the way they came.

2:36-2:41 - Excellent framing here, with her opening the door and getting out right into the middle of the frame. Might want to trim a little bit at the beginning, though.

2:59-3:05 - The first shot should be before the second guy is in the woods already. The OS voice seems like he's still standing in close proximity to the girl.

3:02 - black frame between shots

5:39-5:43 - HA!

6:03-6:15 - EXCELLENT framing here.

6:19-6:20 - HAHAHAHAHA!!!! "Right THERE!"

6:19-6:20 - I had to watch that part again. "Right THERE!" Hehehe.

7:09-7:10 - "LEAVE US ALONE!" HA! You should just have a movie of that guy yelling things. It can be a buddy movie with your guy and my Change Wanting Customer.

6:54-7:44 - You should've had something with an orange glow sitting where you added the fire to give the fire more presence.

8:28-8:31 - Nice.

6:19-6:20 - "Right THERE!" Haha. That never gets old.

8:31-8:36 - Nice shot there. But for a last shot I would've gone with a wide shot of a clearing in the woods, maybe one with a lot of dead trees if you found one.

Thanks for the detailed notes. (I saw this over at CWA too.) Once I get the time, I'll rewatch it with your notes in mind & see if I can pick out the spots you are talking about, but I really appreciate the in depth feedback.