Has anyone wrote a short story?

[bloodcreature]

Flayed one, I left feedback for your story.

[bloodcreature]

Originally posted by AUSTIN316426808
Who exactly are you that we would want or for lord knows what reason, be afraid of your critique?

"You" is singular and referred to zero, you said "we" as if I spoke to everyone. Still confused?

Just post a story and I will critique.

[The_Return]

I put another one up.

[PR3SSUR3]

I don't think I'm wrong in thinking they are getting worked up enough to say, soon enough, something like: "Suck our (plural) balls," or "Sample our (plural) aged rectums.".

[bloodcreature]

Originally posted by Zero
i have a horrific short story called REVENGE OF THE COPYEDITOR - its very gory and is filled with COMMA SPLICES (and DICES)!



geez- do you think your imagination is so awesome that your utter inability to render a single sentence within the broad parameters of the english language can be overcome. . .

(ALSO - PLEASE head down to the often neglected "post your fiction" section and spare us these ramblings)

The "i" should be capitalized and you might want to put the story title in quotations considering you use all caps on certain parts of your sentences. Also, all caps is screaming. Why are you so loud?

Another thing "its" should be it's as in it is, "english" should be capitalized, "COPYEDITOR" is two words, the "g" in geez should be capitalized and "geez isn't a word. I think you meant "Jeez".

My, my, my... your command of the English language is astounding to say the least.

I think that just about does it. Of course, my inability to render a single sentence in the broad parameters of the English language may have affected my ability to edit this post.

[PR3SSUR3]

You've spelt "ego", "definately", "you're" and "afraid" wrong so far.

Therefore, I'm not so sure these are going to be reliable critiques.

[bloodcreature]

Originally posted by PR3SSUR3
You've spelt "ego", "definately", "you're" and "afraid" wrong so far.

Therefore, I'm not so sure these are going to be reliable critiques.

You spelled definitely incorrectly. So we all make mistakes, just my point entirely.


I'm not making claims that I use perfect English, far from it. I merely pointed out the fact that zero doesn't either, and has no reason to complain about my usage.

Anyway, thanks for showing me my errors. Ego and definitely where a typos... you're was just a fuck-up. Also, I didn't spell afraid wrong.

[PR3SSUR3]

You definately spelt 'afraid' wrong, sir - twice now.

Whoops - 'definitely'... I'm as bad as you.

;)

[AUSTIN316426808]

Originally posted by bloodcreature
"You" is singular and referred to zero, you said "we" as if I spoke to everyone. Still confused?

Just post a story and I will critique.

Whatever the fuck ever, I didn't know I had to be so technical.

[bloodcreature]

We don't have to be so technical, but others are holding me to it. We all could use some help with spelling and grammar, and this is my point for responding to zero correcting me.

It's not a big deal to make mistakes. It's a human forum.

Yes, I didn spell afraid wrong. I keep hitting the "f" key among others as I type fast. Add that to my shitty grammar and my posts can be a mess. lol